Rid yourself of those meaningless words, “very” being one of them. They just take up space and dilute your intended meaning.
One of my favorite (or should I say least favorite?) overused words is “personally”. I cannot tell you how many times I have read an essay that says “I personally feel……” Considering you started the sentence with “I” and then “feel” I’m pretty sure “personally” is understood.
Seth Godin’s blog is short, to the point and worth a read, to be noted for when you speak and when you write your college essay. Enjoy!